Is this poem beautiful/grammatically correct?

The breath When it comes out of your warm chest Turns into a dark cloud Standing in front of you, like a wall What do you expect from your friends close or far?
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Anonymous

You might happily leave your poems here for a few days so you can be advised by people?

Cogito

Sorry, but it's not. The last line doesn't seem to have anything to do with the rest of it, and breath doesn't come out of your chest - it comes out of your lungs and mouth or nose. It also doesn't come out dark, even in cold weather. And please stop posting the same question over and over again. Once is enough.

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