How do I correct my poem grammatically?

The breath, When it comes out of your warm chest, Turns into a dark cloud, Standing in front of you, like a wall. What do you expect from your close friends or far?
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No comma ending third line. No comma in fourth line. The only other thing I would change is the final phrase - What do you expect from your friends close or far? Which is both more correct and more clear and - I think - more "rhythmic"

Eddie

It's a poem, as such, grammar can take a back seat.